BONUS

THAT'S DEMOCRACY - OUTLINE


For those of you who are interested in how we make our stories, here is the final outline we used when we recorded this story. Anything not in this outline was improvised by the actors or changed in the recording session and during the editing process.


Outline by Louis Kornfeld


PART 1 - Trying the get the class’ attention

PART 2 - Heartfelt Speech

PART 3 - Change of plan - New lesson

PART 4 - The Gun - The Threat - Disbelief

PART 5 - GUN SHOT! - File cabinet - Chaos - Student speeches & debate

PART 6 - Intercom - GUN SHOT! - Banging on door - Election - GUN SHOT!

PART 7 - Eric’s ESSAY


PART 1

-School bell rings.  Jeffrey Mohr, a forty- year old high school social studies teacher tries to quiet his class and get things started. Students all continue talking in their own groups.  He can't hide his frustration.

 

-Mr. Mohr is trying to get the class to put their phones away.  He can't get through. He starts anyway “Did everyone create the reading on Representative Democracy vs. True Democracy?” Margaret is the only one in the only one in the class who's clearly paying attention. "Guys, these class discussions don't work if no one does the reading". Eric and friends make some joke from the back.  Everyone laughs.

 

PART 2

-Frustrated that he cannot get the class to focus, Mr. Mohr has a small outburst that gets everyone to stop talking.  In the silence, he makes a heartfelt speech to the class:  


"I know that some of you think that this stuff is boring.  I didn't get into teaching so that I could spend my life preparing you for tests that you won't remember in six months.   I got into this because I had teachers in my life who inspired me to love knowledge and to love my own sense of curiosity and to love the world around me, and I felt honor bound to pass that along.  


- Just as it appears that the speech might have had an impact, another joke is made the breaks the moment.


- As the class laughs, Mr. Mohr takes a moment of silence... there is a change in his tone:


PART 3


“You know what?  You’re right Eric, this is stupid.  I have another better idea.  Put your books away everyone.  Margaret, please come to the front of the class."  Margaret is heckled as she gets up.  "Eric, you come up here too."

 

-"I'm going to assume that you didn't do the reading, so instead, to make a point about representative democracy, and the importance of making informed decisions about the people you choose to act in your interest.  We're going to have a little election of our own right here.  Each of your fellow classmates will make a short speech and at the end you'll have a chance to vote."


"But Mr. Mohr, I don't have a speech prepared."  


"That's okay Eric, it'll be extemporaneous.  Do you know what that means?  It means on the spot.  It used to be a skill that students needed to know; it's a great thing to practice.   You'll do fine."  Etc. 

 

-"Mr. Mohr, what are we voting for?"  


"Tami, that's the first smart question anyone's asked all day.  What are we voting for?  Exactly. Today you'll be voting for a representative for the whole class, someone who's vested with the terrible responsibility of making a decision on behalf of all of you. "  


"What's the decision?"  


"Who gets to live"  


Mr. Mohr pulls a pistol out of his bag leading to confused and hushed panic.  


PART 4

"Life is full of hard choices and sometimes those choices aren't all in our control.  We have to know the basis to make sound decisions, even if we don't want to. Someone in this class will be killed this afternoon; that I can promise you.  You're going to vote on a candidate who'll decide who that person will be."  


"Well what if we don't vote?"  


"Well then Adam, I'll kill you.”


( whimpers, “oh my god” etc..) no one is yet sure what is really happening.


“How is you killing us part of the democratic process?”


“Cause I’m not me anymore, Daniel.  I’m a nuclear warhead from North Korea.  I’m industrial chemicals seeping into your drinking water.  I’m a homegrown militia born from a lawless country.  You can't put off what you don't want to happen.  If you shirk your responsibilities it'll happen anyway, just arbitrarily.  You have a say in the outcome of things."  Etc.


“So, now, let the speeches begin.”  Silence.  “I said... let the speeches begin”


BANG!!!  


PART 5

Chaos ensures. Desks screech, people scream, foot steps.


“Get away from the door!! Back in your seats.  You can’t run from the world!  You can’t tweet your woes away. No one’s leaving this room.  The borders are closed!”


File cabinet get’s pushed over.


“Now let’s hear some speeches.  The clock is ticking.”

 

-Each candidate in turn makes a short speech.  Eric makes a case for the weird foreign kid who doesn't talk to anyone.  Margaret takes a pacifist stand, but when pushed by everyone changes her mind and makes a case to kill Eric.  Etc.  


The principal comes in over the loud speaker.  “Everyone remain in your classrooms.  The police have been notified and are on...”


BANG!!!  Mr. Mohr shoots the intercom.  SCREAMS


PART 6

“Time’s up!  It’s election day!”


Eventually the class votes.  By this time there's banging on the door.  The principal and security guards are trying to get in.

 

-The class has voted for Eric.  Margaret is crying, the foreign kid is crying, the door is being banged against.  


"Alright Eric, your classmates have decided to entrust you with the power of life and death.   This is democracy in action folks."  


"I choose you Mr. Mohr.  You're the one who dies."  


Silence


We hear Mr. Mohr cock the gun, stick in his mouth and blow his brains out to the shock and horror of everyone. Sounds of confusion, crying, the door being broken down, etc.

 

PART 7

-Those sounds fade out as we hear Eric describing the scene.  He's reading from an essay he's written called "Survival."  He finishes the essay and is met with accolades from the admissions board at Harvard, who see the boy as a young man of fine and courageous character, exactly the kind of person this institution was founded for.   


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